Iceflame~Thunderclan

[windrunner]

Name: Iceflame

Gender: She cat

Age: 15 Moons

Rank: Warrior

Description: A pretty white she cat her coat is as white as ice. Her eyes have an icy flame in them. The tip of her tail is ginger. She has thin ginger stripes going up to the tip of her tail. Last she has thin black stripes on her legs.

Short Description: Medium White she cat

Accessories: None

Personality: She is very protective of kits because of what happened to her as a kit. She can be very stubborn and is very impatient.If you get her in a bad mood then her tongue can be sharper than her claws. She fights fiercely against intruders unless they don't deserve it. Also she hates cats who remind her of her kithood.

History: Icekit looked around her. Her mother, her brother and sister were on the cold hard ground dead. She knew the rogues would kill her next so she waited. Just when the lightning crackled they attacked. She felt sharp claws and teeth tearing her apart. She also heard the the rogues yowling in delight. When they were done they just left her their to die like her mother, brother and sister in the ice cold rain.Then she heard paws and felt teeth on her scruff while the cat was carrying her she fell asleep. When she woke up she was in a strange place.

[D.e.a.t.h]

Looks good wait for raven. You could probably add more description and you need a Rp sample.

[[R] a v e n]

Looks like a good beginning to a bio. But in the descriptions the sentences need to be longer and you need a little more descriptive. Just don't forget to watch your sentence length.

[windrunner]

DescriptionIceflame is a medium white she cat her legs are short and they have thin black stripes on them.She has a thin long tail and tip of her tail is ginger and she has thin ginger stripes going up to the tip of her tail.Her eyes are an icy blue her eyes seem to have an icy flame in them.Her ears have a dark black outline on them and the hair in her ears are black.The tips of her whiskers are a dark blck and so is the begininng of them.

[[R] a v e n]

good but keep in mind you can modify your posts ^-^, Go on and post.

ACCEPTED

[windrunner]

thanks yea i forgot about the modify tghing